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Devoir Anglais - Exercice - 1ère Bac S

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Le sujet d une de mes rédactions en anglais est de dire quelle sorte de parents je rêverais d avoir .

J ai fini la rédaction et j espère que vous pourrez me corrigez les erreurs plus ou moins tragiques que j aurais pu faire .

Où j'en suis :

The way the parents behave is essential, because it is the base on which every new individual forms and builds himself.

The parents about whom I shall dream about credit note would be thoughtful, protective but without suffocating me.

They would always have the sentence which would console me or would comfort me.
Besides meeting my needs, they would assure me a future full of promises, better doubtless.

They would discuss with me of interesting subject, considering me of this fact as an equal.

Parents with small defects which would make their charm and would make the more cheerful everyday life less gloomy, here is the parents about whom I would dream about credit note, full of contrasts and intelligent.

Having written these lines, me reports me that I describe my own parents milked for lines is this strange step?

And indeed I think that not, because we look like all in a sense our parents.

They are perfect with their small imperfections, I would not want it the others and I thank god for having given them to me.

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+ Bac +5 Doctorat - 328 points - 18/09/2010 à 13:49

The way the parents behave is essential, because it is the base on which every new individual forms and builds himself.

The parents whom I shall dream of would be thoughtful, protective but without suffocating me.

They would always have comforting sentences
Besides meeting my needs, they would support me of a future full of promises, better doubtless( ?).

They would debate with me of interesting subject, thus dealing with me as an equal.

Parents with small imperfections which would make their charm and would make them more cheerful,so that everyday life is less gloomy ; here are the parents whom I would dream about (credit note ?), full of contrasts and intelligent.

those lines being written, I reaalize that I described my own parents (milked ?) for lines is this strange step (?)

And indeed I don't think that , because we all look like our parents in a sense .

They are perfect with their small imperfections, I would not want (it?) the others and I thank god for having given them to me.